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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides.

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Mathematics is an essential part of
life whether
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life, whether
 people
has
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have
 it in their later
life
 or not. Though it is very difficult for some people to have maths as their subject because not everyone has the ability to do hard analytical
problems but
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problems, but
 I believe it is very necessary to have mathematics as a foundational subject in their school and college
life
. Like all other subjects, we need to have some basic knowledge of maths to survive in our daily
life
. No matter what subject we choose to study in
future
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the future
, we need to know certain calculations. If a person
choose
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chooses
 not to study science in his future, but studies complex mathematics in his school level, it will help him even if he chooses to study business in future as he will be having some statistics courses and basic mathematics courses there.
Besides
, in daily
life
, everyone has to go through
calculation
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the calculation
. Even if someone is not
hellbent
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hell bent
 to do any type of complex calculation in their daily
life
, he or she needs to do
atleast
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at least
 basic calculation to buy their necessary products, manage their finances, or even taking bank loans to buy a house or car.
Finally
, not everyone is fond of algebra, calculus,
geomatry
the pure mathematics of points and lines and curves and surfaces
geometry
 and other mathematics, but to survive in todays world, one must know how to calculate basic
maths
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math
 problems.
Otherwise
, it will be very difficult to cope up with
this
 modern era.
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