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Some people believe that job should be related to our university major and some people not, discuss and tell your idea

#people #job #university #idea
Nobody can deny that
university
 major influence is important for our job, at least in cases which
career
 need special knowledge.
However
, it is by no means clear that related studies help individuals to improve their
work
 quality, as we will see. One the one hand, it may appear advisable for everybody to study
university
 major that they want to
work
 in that field.
This
 allows people to learn and absorb knowledge which they can use in their future
career
.
Furthermore
, study the related field should reduce the risk of unemployment and insufficient income.
On the other hand
, we have to ask whether
this
 is a practical proposition. In a society where many families are dual-income to pay the routine costs and
university
 studies have a negative
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on an individual, family or both when it comes to
university
 costs and time expenses. Actually, it is inevitable that many people
can not
can not
cannot
 access the
university
 studies because their tight budget or they can not find proper and related job
career
 in their living area. In many cases the
career
do not need
Suggestion
does not need
 long learning courses and good quality in
work
 can be perfectly viable with short, practical and efficient courses. Equally, it seems that many people can in some cases learn a considerable amount from their colleagues without spending their life and wealth in studying may be a benefit. To conclude, it appears that, while related major is essential for some careers and there are definite advantages when you can study and
work
 in the same
field but
Accept comma addition
field, but
 there are some drawbacks
such
 as investing large amounts of time and money needed,
also
, many skills could be possible through peer to peer learning in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
 or would be provided in short syllabus.
Finally
, almost there is not crucial to learn everything in the
university
.

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