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Films can have effect on the children's education and teach them many things. Do you think it is always a positive influence? Discuss.

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Cinema has always played a crucial role in influencing the masses, be it in a positive or a negative way. Movies can have an
impact
 on a
child
's mind and
hence
 can mould them into a good or a bad person. In my opinion, pictures cannot always have a positive
impact
 as there are different genres which have varied
content
. It affects positive thoughts and normal mental processing.
Firstly
, in the case of a strictly 'A' rated adult
movie
, which children often might want to watch out of curiosity.
This
 can lead to a negative
impact
 on their mind as a
child
's mind is the most vulnerable during teenage.
For instance
, watching a
movie
 scene which has an explicit
content
 meant for 18 plus would definitely leave an imprint on their
brain which
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brain, which
 in turn can force them to do something of the same nature.
This
 in turn could land them into trouble at
school
 or college.
On the other hand
, the movies which are based on social issues like "Clean India Campaign" and
also
 on technological advancements like "Mission Mars" could play an important role in motivating a
child
 to go in for something big which will benefit the nation.
Secondly
, cinema can turn fatal for the physical well being too. Movies and web
content
 which
as
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 lots of action and violence involved gives a
child
 the idea to bring it in the real life. He or she may try those action tricks seen in a
movie
on
Suggestion
with
 their friends in
school
.
For example
, there was a case in the newspapers of ABC
school
,
Delhi where
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Delhi, where
 a
child
 twisted his friend's ear which caused him unconsciousness. Post investigation, the
school
 found out that
this
 has been a result of movies as the
child
 is a
movie
 buff. While some people assert that movies
on
Suggestion
with
 violence and action can teach self-defence in order to protect themselves in case of any adversity, which may be true if the
content
 is of quality. Conclusively, entertainment can be in any form, whether it is a role play,
movie
 or a street play, it must convey the right message to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
audience especially
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audience, especially
 children who are on the lookout for adopting the ways and means to do
things
Suggestion
the things
 shown in a film.
Thus
, movies have different
content
 and categories and
therefore
, cannot have positive
impact
 always.
Submitted by Shreyans Aery on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • education
  • broaden
  • worldviews
  • diversity
  • moral lessons
  • development
  • behavior
  • documentaries
  • engaging
  • stereotypes
  • violence
  • detrimental
  • perceptions
  • excessive screen time
  • physical health
  • social skills
  • parental guidance
  • discern
  • fantasy
  • reality
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