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Present a written argument to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?

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There has been some implications that many serious environmental hazards can be solved by increasing
fuel
 rates
such
 as petrol, diesel etc. Is it possible to save
this
 world from
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 damages just by increasing
fuel
 prices? I completely disagree with the statement. Let’s examine some of the possible reasons.
Firstly
, there has been a staggering growth of serious environmental issues which are making human existence impossible. The one popular reason causing these damages to the earth is using of vehicles. Due to more and more automobiles coming from different companies arousing problems of traffic congestion, pollution, road accidents etc.
For example
- there has been many accidents and uncontrollable pollution range has been recorded high when compared to past years. I agree that high rates of
fuel
 can somewhat solve the issue
to
Suggestion
with
 30% of
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 damage still I believe it depends on various factors like planting more trees and keeping our surroundings crisp and clean.
Secondly
,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
have
Suggestion
has
 to take some serious actions on using frequent usage of vehicles provided that bicycles can be a choice.
Fuel
 prices
doesn’t affect
Suggestion
don’t affect
 affluent
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
 it can raise many issues in lower and upper middle-class families. Some people use vehicles daily to go to their jobs and by increasing prices can affect their wages.
Furthermore
, the supply of bicycles from higher authorities will encourage people to use them
instead
 of bikes and cars.
Last
 but not least, people should come up to encourage public transport and usage of bicycles
instead
 of using vehicles which are affecting our
environment
. Government has to take some viable actions.
Therefore
, I believe increasing
fuel
 rates are not the best solution to resolve
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 problems.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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