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levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. what are the reasons for this and suggest some possible solutions.

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The
crime
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 rate among
youth
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 is indeed increasing at an alarming rate in many countries worldwide.
This
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 essay will examine the causes of
this
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 problem and suggest some possible solutions to combat
levels
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the levels
 of
youth
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crime
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. The main reason behind the rise in
youth
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offence
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offending
 is that parents are unable to nurture their kids well as they are too busy with their job and have no
time
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 to talk to their children.
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, with
time
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 they will indulge themselves in evil activities
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 as gambling and kidnapping, showing parents are unaware of the company their kids are keeping outside their home. Another factor is the rise in unemployment in
youth
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, meaning they have a high qualification but are still jobless.
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, a city in Pakistan, Karachi, and
pickpocketing
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 and snatching expensive things over gunpoint has become so common and to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the basic needs
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 as to own a house or start a family, youngsters have no choice but to earn by illegal means. There are some possible solutions associated with the rampant increase in
youth
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crime
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.
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 and foremost, parents should spare some
time
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 after work to acknowledge their children about manners.
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, the parent must guide them.
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 will encourage them to give more
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 to
studies
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study
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 of harming others.
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, it is the government’s responsibility to create a job market for new graduates every year.
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, by affiliating
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 with a company for a year so that they can gain experience to start their career as well as providing small grants to start any business. In
this
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 way, parents and
government
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the government
 could collectively safeguard the rights of
youth
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. In conclusion, the factors responsible for
youth
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crime
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 are unemployment and parent’s negligence,
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, these issues can be minimized if the government creates jobs for
masses
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the masses
 and parents’ monitor their children from an early age.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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