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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It cannot be denied that everyone has a basic right to
access
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 clean
water
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 on a daily basis. In
this
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 context, many emphasise the importance of providing a
water
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 supply for every household at no cost. I completely agree with
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 view, as
water
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 is crucial to human survival. First and foremost, people rely heavily on clean
water
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 in every aspect of life. When
access
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 to it is limited by financial requirements, people across society will struggle to obtain it, especially low-income families.
According to
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 a recent survey, many communities in Indonesian rural areas consume contaminated
water
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due to
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 high local
water
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 supply bills.
Consequently
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, it raises the possibility of suffering long-term health problems
such
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 as diarrhoea, cholera, or even
typhus
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typhoid
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.
That is
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 why ensuring continuous
access
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 to free
water
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 for all households is essential for public health.
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,
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 a policy could encourage governments to develop more efficient strategies for
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 conservation. By offering
water
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 without charge, authorities would be pressured to invest in technologies that minimise waste,
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 as advanced
water
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 filtration systems or rainwater harvesting. In the long run,
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 approach could lead to a more sustainable and responsible management of natural resources. New Zealand,
for example
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, has adopted rainwater harvesting systems as a part of its campaign to mitigate
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 scarcity. From
this
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 action, the government has successfully improved
water
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 efficiency among households and businesses. In conclusion, governments should provide clean
water
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 free of charge to ensure equal
access
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 to
this
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 human right and to promote environmental sustainability.

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content
Add more facts or safe data to back up points.
structure
Make one clear topic sentence in each paragraph.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas connect.
accuracy
Check facts to keep them true and fair.
task response
Show a view against your idea and then give a closing line.
task response
Clear view that water must be free.
content
Good use of examples to back up the ideas.
structure
Intro and conclusion are clear.
coherence
Paragraphs have links to the next idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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