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These days more and more people are going to other counties for significant period of time either to find a job or study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Number of people migrating to foreign countries are increasing every year, whether it’s for higher education or occupation. They leave their
country
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 and shift to other countries to get a better
life
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. They
face
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 many difficulties after moving there, but
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, they get various opportunities as well.
This
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 essay will discuss about the positives and the negatives of shifting to abroad for a particular period of time. Youngsters start migrating to various other countries where they can try their luck to get a better
life
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. There they get various job offers from which they give a better
life
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 to their family who are sitting in their native
country
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. People start becoming independent and courageous. Indians complain about corruption, poverty, unemployment, adulteration and many other problems they
face
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 here, after migrating to other developed countries like USA, Canada
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 they feel that they won’t have to
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such
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 problems anymore. Coming out of our comfort zone and leaving our own county and moving to a new
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 to settle down
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 become very challenging. Language and food are the major difficulties that people
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 after migration. Staying alone and away from family for a long period of time makes them depressed and under confident. People have to work hard a lot and
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 their problems all alone. People who live in abroad for occupation or studies
face
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 many problems, but
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 their
life
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 gets better. I believe if a person gets an opportunity to move to a
developed
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developing
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 where he can explore his talent, or create a healthier and progressive
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 for himself and his family,
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 he should definitely grab that chance and lead a happier
life
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.
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