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Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued by some people that
money
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 can be considered as the best present teenagers can be offered.
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, others think that teenagers should be provided with gifts other than
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ney which h
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money, which
ave a greater value for them. In my opinion, I perceive that
money
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 should not be categorised as the best present for them and there are a number of things which are of vital importance that can be presented to teenagers. On the one hand, one of the evident benefits of giving
money
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 to teenagers is that they will have the capability of standing up on their own. With the advancement of technology, there are pl
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a plethora
f avenues for them to pursue to mould their future and having
money
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 in hand will be handy and will be a support to lay the foundation of what they desire. On the flip side, some people believe that
money
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 should not be the most suitable gift for teenagers. Giving
money
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 to teenagers who just enter into the society and are prone to dangerous activities can be a way of spoiling them. Put simply, teenagers when they possess
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money, which
re given free of charge will be attracted to disgraced activities including usage of alcohol, drugs to name a few.
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, teenagers who are expected to pursue higher studies should not be disturbed with these gifts and items should be presented to them which encourage their studies
such
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 as books, tablets etc. To recapitulate, while some people think that
money
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 is the best present teenagers can be given with, they are people in the opinion of giving
money
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 as gifts should not be practiced. In my opinion, I believe that teenagers should be not offered
money
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 as gifts and they should receive items other than
money
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 which ameliorate their education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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