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Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Watching a particular
sport
 is a famous activity in many countries. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of spending one’s free
time
to watching
Suggestion
watching sport
sport
 is a waste of their leisure
time
 or not. While there are some valid arguments to the contrary, I personally agree with the watching
sport
 is a waste of our spare
time
. In the following essay, I will write the reason.
First
 of all, watching
sport
 is a kind of method which releases one’s
stress
 easily and builds a
more close
Suggestion
closer
 relationship between family members. These days, people tend to
stress
 easily due to the social aspects including traffic congestion, air pollution, and workload and so on. In
this
 case, watching
sport
 might help to reduce
stress
 and increase the family bond.
However
, doing physical activities in one’s spare
time
 would build a healthier body
instead
 of just watching a particular
sport
. If people do an exercise which related to their health problems, it will huge benefits for their body.
For example
, recently, I read an article about Charles Matkin who is a famous yoga teacher in America and I found out that she never watches
sport
 in her free
time
,
instead
 of that she do yoga due to her backache and arthritis.
As a result
 of
this
, not only her pains were mitigated but
also
 she became a healthy lifestyle. All in all,
although
 watching
sport
 in one’s spare
time
 might mitigate their
stress
 easily and enhance a family relationship, it would not help a healthier body in the long run.
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