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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #crime #poverty #person’s #nature
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Predominantly known to its local folks as Bombay, the much-loved
city
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 had been re-christened to Mumbai. It’s a
city
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 open to a
ll irrespective
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all, irrespective
of caste, creed or status. Every
place
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 in
this
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city
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 has a story of its own be it Juhu beach
,
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,
Bandra fort, Marine drive Shahrukh Khan's house, Girgaon c
hawpati
a subdivision of a written work; usually numbered and titled
chapter
or VT station. The crowd that gathers brings in mixed emotions for a passerby observing them.
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 known as the
city
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 that never sleeps, industries thrive and people from all over the state descend t
o
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in
this
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 humble
city
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 in search of labour to make ends meet. The beauty of
this
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place
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 has often encapsulated artists, musicians, t
heater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
personnel and many more. Those who h
ave come
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come
for education always head back to brag about the
place
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 while those who receive the education here are not aware of
this
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 luxury. A metropolitan
city
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 always has the dream of a big h
ouse but
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house, but
more often than not people are ready to live in a 16*16 hut. The limitation of space never seems to be p
roblem
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a problem
the problem
problems
here. The
city
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 accommodates anyone and everyone that comes to visit her. Festivals are celebrated on a large scale across communities and that’s what creates harmonious relations. In times of crisis lending a helping hand is the duty of every citizen in
this
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place
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. The rain that we long for is the reason for destruction t
oo but
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too, but
nevertheless
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 stop by and watch the rains in Mumbai, it will seep into your heart.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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