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In my countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places.It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree ?

#countries #smoke #places #people
Over the past few years, a majority of nations have imposed a ban on smoking in shared spaces
such
 as parks, restaurants, and movie theatres and have
instead
 created designated zones for it.While many smokers have not considered
this
 as just, I believe it is absolutely correct and is need of the hour.
To begin
 with, smoking is not only injurious for smokers, but is
also
 deadly for humans who are in the vicinity. Passive smoking is considered dangerous, especially for children and expecting mothers. Studies conducted over the past decade have revealed that the ill effects of smoke generated by cigarettes on infants are disastrous and can lead to lifelong diseases
such
 as asthma and lung cancer.
Hence
, it is mandatory to curb smoking in areas where kids can be exposed to its deadly fumes.
In addition
, the amount of waste generated by the butts and ash is another problem that has been seen across the world.
Although
 there might be dustbins placed by the municipal organizations at short distances, it is not difficult to see cigarette butts on the streets everywhere. A research done by the students of the University of Michigan, it was discovered that the amount of garbage generated by these leftovers in Poland is equivalent to the annual produce of sugar in the country. So people who argue that restricting them from smoking in public places is not fair, are being selfish, and are ignoring environmental hazards caused by
this
 activity. To conclude, smoking in common places has many adverse effects on public health and the cleanliness of the neighbourhood and
hence
 I agree that it is mandatory to ensure that smoking is restricted to the smoking zones only.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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