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In many countries, a few people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is a positive thing for the country. Other people believe that governments should not allow salaries to be over a certain level. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued high amount of salaries earned by
small group
Suggestion
a small group
 of people which should be allowed as
this
 is positive for a country while others believe
government
Suggestion
the government
 should not raise
high number
Suggestion
the high number
 of salary over high range.I will discuss both.
Firstly
, every employed person should get their
job according
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job, according
 to their level of education. Qualification plays a vital role. The more educated you
are the
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are, the
 higher salary should be provided by superintendent as it will have good impact on employees and new students will get motivated and focus more on education which will have
positive imapct
Suggestion
a positive impact
positive impact
 on
country
Suggestion
the country
. Employees should even get
pay
Suggestion
paid
 in accordance with achievement,
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 and
persistent
Suggestion
persistence
. Students will get motivated and focus more on
eduction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 which is a plus sign for any country.
Furthermore
, salaries must be provided at limited level not too much high as it will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 country’s economy and
balance
Suggestion
the balance
 must be needed. Everyone should get their pay according to work and bonus should be given to
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
 of
person
Suggestion
people
persons
 whose salary is not that high to get them motivated for their work. To conclude, every person should be provided their amount of money according to their
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
, education and interest towards work and bonus should be given to
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
 of people with low amount of salaries to get them motivated.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
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