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The many major
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 around the world is increasingly facing
overpopulation
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 problem
as a result
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 of the choice of many people to live there.
This
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essay
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 will discuss the main causes of
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overpopulation including
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overpopulation, including
 better
job
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 opportunities and
quality
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 of
life
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.
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essay
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 will
also
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 suggest solutions to these
problems including
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problems, including
 creating new
business
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 occasions and proving same
life
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 standards like other cities. People are looking for better
job
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 opportunities.
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,
they
of them or themselves
their
 desire to increase their
quality
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 of
life
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. In order to maintain their living costs, people need to earn money so that they may increase their
life
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quality
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.
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, some people are willing to possess a luxury
car and to live
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car and live
 in a mansion after earning enough money. The result in
overpopulation
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 because they want to change their
circumstance
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circumstances
 by trying their chance in a challenging environment. Creating new
business
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 occasions and providing same
life
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 standards like other cities are both critical to mitigating
overpopulation
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 in cities. If the same
business
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 opportunities
with
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by
provided
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providing
 same
life
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 standards like urban cities are available, people don’t attend a new adventure by trying their chance in urban cities.
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, the government may
do
engage in
make
 money investing for new start-up entrepreneurs or open new
job
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 areas by hiring qualified persons, so people’s
life
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quality
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 will be increased because of developments in cities.
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, in order to reduce
overpopulation
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, one must do
by
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with
 creating new
business
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 occasions and proving the same living standards as other cities. In conclusion, the many major
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 around the world is increasingly facing
overpopulation
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 problem
as a result
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 of the choice of many people to live there.
This
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essay
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 discussed how
overpopulation
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 is caused by better
job
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 opportunities and
quality
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 of
life
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.
This
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essay
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also
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 discussed that the solutions to
this
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 problem as creating new
business
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 occasions and proving the same
life
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 standards to other cities.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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