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The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extend do you agree or disagree?

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Road
 safety has become a measure concern these days. Whether rigorous penalties would be the most effective way to deter driving offences, is a very controversial issue.
Although
, I
second
 that the implementation of harsher punishments could be the best solution for hindering the
road
 accident, there are other methods which should be applied by the
government
 for making people conscious about
road
 safety.
First
 and foremost, the implementation of rigid rules regarding
road
 safety proved to be fruitful.
For example
, in Vietnam, the citizens are punished for not wearing a helmet from $20 to $40.Fearing for
this
 penalty, people never put off their helmet during driving.
Moreover
, if the
government
 does not make that hard laws for the would-be offenders, it is possible that the
law
 breakers would conveniently break the
law
.
For instance
, in Singapore, before 1980, the
government
 did not impose any
law
 regarding
road
 casualties, which had caused many lives meaningless for their families and society. When the authority saw
this
, they started new rules and regulations which were the most effective in the long run.
Similarly
, people have started to think about more measures that should be taken to minimize
road
 injuries of death, regardless of the implementation of various types of
law
. The most effective one could be that the
government
 should heighten people’s awareness by the media.
This
, eventually, could help people to understand not only the bad impact of not abiding by rules
such
 as wearing a helmet at the time of driving, maintaining traffic signals, but it
also
 makes people conscious about their lives. The other measure is that encouraging people to use the public transport
such
 as bus, train, et Cetra. In conclusion, while it is true that rigorous penalties are the key to impede
road
 accidents, raising people’s consciousness and encouraging people to use public transports, in my opinion, could
also
 be the best methods.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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