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Around the world, children learn English as a second language at school. However, in some places, they also learn at kindergarten (pre-school care, when children are aged two to five). Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of learning English at kindergarten.

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nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
 everyone
need
Suggestion
needs
 to learn a
second
 language.
as
Suggestion
As
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 is the only language which used
everwhere
to or in any or all places
everywhere
 in the world, so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 shall
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 the advantages and disadvantages in the upcoming paragraph.
to
Suggestion
To
 begin with,
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 is most spoken
languga
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
languages
 over the world.
if
Suggestion
If
 anyone wants to do a job or want to go
abrod
to or in a foreign country
abroad
 for their higher education they may know
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
.
in
Suggestion
In
 some schools
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 is
second preferrable language
Suggestion
the second preferable language
second preferable language
its
reflexive from of "it"
itself

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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