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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill to be made as a forth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Since ancient times, the core subjects of education were considered to be reading, writing and mathematics.
However
, I totally agree with the argument that studying
computer
 has become vital
for
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in
 today’s world. Before the invention of computers, people used complex systems,
such
 as
abacus
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the abacus
, for doing
calculation
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calculations
the calculation
. Learning about digits and basic operations involving them, like addition, subtraction, division and multiplication,
was
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were
 prerequisite to operate abacus.
Furthermore
, the definition of a literate person was confined only to
ability
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the ability
 of people who could read and write their names. Businesses and technology was not so advanced, and the only skill to compete and survive in society was to read and write.
Therefore
, schools were focusing only to improve their
students
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students'
student's
 understanding about calculations, reading and writing.
However
, the invention of
computer
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computers
the computer
 has brought revolutionary changes in every
day’s
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day
 life. It has not only changes the dynamics of trade and communication, but
also
 demanded changing our education system. Now, there is not even a single device that can be operated without
computer
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a computer
 or its derived systems. From hanging digital wall clocks in your houses to aeroplanes flying over your head, everything is dependent on
computer
 based programs for its operation. So, rather than enlisting it as a fourth skill, it should be ranked as
top
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a top
the top
 and compulsory subject of modern education system. To conclude, while knowledge of basic calculation, reading and writing helped people in the past to survive, I strongly believe that survival in today’s modern world is not possible without having sufficient knowledge of
computer
 subjects.
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