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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Research has stated, that human activities have resulted in global warming. There are several reasons for the earth's temperature to increase. The ways to combat the rising degree will be discussed
further
. The melting of polar ice caps, drew the attention of scientists.
This
 was caused
as a result
 of the dip in temperature. The entrapment of greenhouse gases on the surface of the earth has led to increase in heat and decrease in cool climates.
For example
, the thawing of cool regions increases sea levels, and results in a tsunami destroying millions of lives. Since, man uses excessive carbon dioxide through products like air conditioners the gases emitted from it are harmful to the environment. The burning of fossil fuels, especially petrol has been a matter of concern for a long time and its depletion is alarming. The solution to the increasing climate change is tackling the problem in various ways.
For example
:
instead
 of using petrol, automotive experts have come up with an alternative source. Solar energy obtained from the sun has been yet another invention to replace the use of power and electricity. On an individual level, people are urged to plant trees in abundance as plants inhale carbon dioxide and exhale oxygen.
In addition
 to
this
 method wealthy citizens are urged to reduce their use of cooling systems. There is proof that the careless attitude of man is causing destruction of the only planet he can call home. Steps adhered to, will ensure the survival of man in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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