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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night uncles they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Government authorities in US are often concerned about the safety of their teenagers and
that is
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 why government
impose
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imposes
 laws to ensure safety of teenagers. In my opinion, I strongly believe imposing
curfew
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 on teenagers to travel with an
adult
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 during late hours
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are
 an entirely necessary practice and I will discuss my point of view in subsequent paragraphs. Let me
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 begin by discussing
why according
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why, according
 to some people imposing curfews
on
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for
 teenagers
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is
 a bane.
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, if teenagers are let to travel on their
own it
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own, it
 helps them to gain self confidence to deal with
worse
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worst
 case scenarios.
For instance
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, if teenagers are faced with emergency situations to rush to a hospital at late hours on their
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own, then
then
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 teenagers may find it difficult to cope up due to their dependency to be accompanied by an
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.
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, many teenagers are away from their family and adults, in order to study at hostels and dormitories.
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 teenagers may find it practically impossible to look for adults to accompany them at
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.
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,
such
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 curfews restrict
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 of teenagers for important purposes
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for
 only particular hours. Overall, due to a few reasons discussed above, many people do not support the idea of imposing a
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 in
US
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the US
 which makes it compulsory for teenagers to be accompanied by an
adult
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 at late
night
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 hours.
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, I believe imposing a
curfew
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 in US on teenagers is mandatory to make sure teenagers are safe and protected from any kind of harm and criminal activity. Teenagers are vulnerable targets and are easily kidnapped at late hours. Teenagers do not have a very good understanding to safeguard themselves;
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, it is easier to trap teenagers for kidnapping purposes. At times when teenagers are travelling alone at
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, kidnappers easily victimize teenagers.
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, there is always high speed traffic in US on roads during late hours, in
such
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 circumstances, teenagers may have to face road accidents because teenagers are unable to
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analyse
 how to safely cross
road
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the road
 due to lack of experience and tender age. Overall, the idea to impose a
curfew
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 in US on teenagers to travel with adults at late
night
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 hours is well-informed and is an entirely relevant strategy to ensure protection of teenagers. In my opinion, imposing a
curfew
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 in US to protect movements of teenagers at late hours by making sure that they are looked after by an
adult
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 is a absolute imperative and is justifiable under reasons/circumstances discussed above

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imposed
  • accompany
  • ensure
  • safety
  • security
  • protection
  • potential dangers
  • responsible behavior
  • discipline
  • instill
  • awareness
  • societal norms
  • expectations
  • negative impact
  • social development
  • freedom
  • overly strict
  • hinder
  • socialize
  • independence
  • decisions
  • juvenile delinquency
  • crime rates
  • correlational
  • causal
  • exception
  • flexibility
  • legitimate
  • educational obligations
  • balanced approach
  • individual circumstances
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