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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped?

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Presently it seems to be an increasingly widespread discussion about poverty. It is spread knowledgeable that all
countries even
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countries, even
 the richest ones has poor individuals, and each country have different ways to tackle
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 issue.
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Unfortunately we
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Unfortunately, we
 still see plenty of poverty in our modern
world
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. Countries rated as 4º or 3º
world
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have
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has
 the biggest number of these people who suffer with starving and social problems. These problems are related
with
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to
 the colonization of these countries, and even know a day people harvest the consequences of a malicious colonization that just explored the ores and
nature
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the nature
 of those who were colonized. Because of that some countries are today very rich, called the 1º
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, while others are still struggling to develop and even pay for the colony a macro bill that do not have any sense. Having said that, we can agree that some
countries unfortunately
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countries, unfortunately
 have much more poor people than other. Speaking about the sub developed countries, we can see that even without too much resources to deal with their social problems, they still create many different types of programs that are used to help that ones that are in need. And it is easy to see many companies and personal investment in institutions that have the goal to aid people.
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Generally
 speaking, in poor countries we see more empathy and motivation for people to help each other. While in rich countries, we realize that the public pressure towards the government makes it to give away more money in pro of the poor ones. To conclude, in our
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 we have
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big problem social
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big social problem
, and it is
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the responsibility
a responsibility
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, not just the governments, but everyone that
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is
 able to spare some money, should
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do
 that. It is the only way that we can help all those poor that need to be helped.

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