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Many things used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines .do this bring more advantages or disadvantages ?

#home #hands #machines
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In
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 day and age
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 advancement of
technology
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 has brought enormous of changes in every field, nowadays
,
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,
household
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 chores are done with the help of electronic gadgets by which
masses
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masses'
mass
life
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become
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becomes
 easier and convenient.
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 and foremost benefits of
technology
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 is that folks lives marevelous
life
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, as earlier people do domestic
work
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 with their hands,
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 they lead to very stressfull
life
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 , but now , in
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 modern era , by doing
household
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work
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 with the help of electronic equipments , they save a lot of
time
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 to pursue their leisure activity and live a superior
life
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 ,
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 , in developed coubtries
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 as Canada and Australia 70% of women consume their dwell
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 by doing shopping ,
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 happens just because of advance-edged
technology
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hence
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, machines saves a lot of
time
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 of humans and they live a finer
life
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 .
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, as electronic gadgets do
household
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work
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instead
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 of human beings , and by
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 people eradicate their daily routine and get opportunity to do job , as in past all and sundry is engaged in doing house
work
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 ,
thus
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 they do not get
time
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 for doing employement but, in
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 era , all thanks to
technology
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 which gives chance to earn fruitfull salary because all
household
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 chores are done by machines by which people can do their jobs effectively and efficiently ,
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 , in developed countries majority of folks gives
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 priority to do their jobs because clothes are washed by washing machines and inatant cooking is done on microwaves
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 electronic gadgets are very beneficial for human beings. In
cinclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
consolation
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 it is
fact
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the fact
 that
technology
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 has
chnged
made or become different in nature or form
changed
 the whole world
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,
 in
this
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 era
,
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people live a less
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
nad
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
marvelous
extraordinarily good or great; used especially as an intensifier
marvellous
life
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 because domestic works are done by electronic equipments and gives a wonderful
life
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 as
compare
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comparable
 to past
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • domestic help
  • smart home technologies
  • energy-efficient
  • resource depletion
  • over-dependence
  • external services
  • maintenance
  • replacements
  • leisure activities
  • tedious tasks
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