The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The supplied graphs compare the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
who travelled
different
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countries from 1985 to 1995 and
it
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also
give
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data on
Australia
's portion of
the
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apply
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Japanese
visitors.
According to
the first bar graph, the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
visited
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visiting
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abroad
had
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increased
in
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each year except for 1991.
Initially
, in 1985, around 5
million
tourists
from Japan travelled abroad and after a decade
this
number
more than trebled. About 2
million
Japanese
tourists
went to
Australia
in 1985. From 1985
till
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1988, the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
in
Australia
increased sharply. Beginning from 2
million
tourists
in 1985, it reached
to
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around 5
million
in 1988. In 1989, the
number
fell slightly but from 90 to 94, the
number
went up.
However
, in 1994 the
number
of people who went to
Australia
decreased a bit. The two graphs represent the steady increase
of
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total
Japanese
tourists
travelling
different
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countries
as well as
the
number
of
tourists
visiting
Australia
in Particular
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japanese, tourists, australia, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist market
  • overseas travel
  • tourism industry
  • international campaigns
  • economic prosperity
  • travel preferences
  • market share
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trend
  • attracting
  • destination
  • variability
  • contributing factors
  • currency exchange rates
  • speculate
  • tourism policies
  • competitive markets
  • popularity
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