Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is absolutely no doubt about the health threats
consumption
of
tobacco
poses to smokers and passive smokers around them. There are divergent views as to whether the banning of smoking in public places is the right decision or not. While there are some concerns about the health risks
consumption
of
tobacco
causes, I disagree that the use in public places should be prohibited.
To begin
with, a restriction on public
consumption
of cigarette would have a negative effect on the profitability of the manufacturers and the
government
. Production as a whole is a capital-intensive business and investors would have put in a lot of money to set up the businesses. The investors deserve a return on their investments. More so,
the less profitable
Suggestion
the least profitable
these businesses are, the lesser the taxes they are able to pay to the
government
annually.
This
is because
tobacco
is highly taxed in most jurisdictions and a ban on the public
consumption
would likely reduce its use which would
then
reduce
government
revenue from sales tax.
In addition
, the cost of compliance to new laws is usually very expensive. The
government
would need to embark on some
infrastructural
development that would help them with monitoring compliance and successful conviction of offenders. They would probably have to set up a court to attend to cases of noncompliance. These would likely be funded using taxpayers money that could be utilized for
more critical
Suggestion
most critical
aspects of the economy
such
as education and transportation. In conclusion,
although
tobacco
is considered to be a leading cause of cancer for consumers and people around them, a ban on public
consumption
would be detrimental to the economy as a whole. Not only would it reduce
government
revenue, compliance would
also
come at a huge cost.
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