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Nowadays, some children spend many hours every day using smartphones and other devices. The advantages of allowing children to own these devices outweigh the disadvantages? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt, children spend their most of the time using
smartphones
 in their daily life. Should children be allowed
using
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to use
 these devices? There are advantages as well as disadvantages for allowing children to use
smartphones
. I will discuss both.
Firstly
, usage of
smartphones
 has become
habit
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a habit
the habit
 of children
nowadays which
Accept comma addition
nowadays, which
 really affect them.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, it
effect
have an effect upon
affect
eye sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
 at
very young age which
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a very young age, which
a very young age which
 make them difficult in doing their daily
tasks so,
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tasks, so
 it should be avoided as it has
bad impact
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a bad impact
bad impacts
 on
child
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the child
children
a child
.
Secondly
, It should be used for learning process and as it is really helpful when it comes to educational purpose. Students can
accquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
acquired
 much knowledge and can perform their difficult task which would sometimes be impossible without
smartphones
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smart phones
.
For instance
, one of my
friend
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friends
, sometimes find difficulty in solving
maths
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math
 problems so she learnt tips and tricks to solve problems by using some educational apps. There is no doubt it is helpful when we need
helpor
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help or
 solve some problems. To conclude,
smartphones
 should be used for searching or solving problems
whenver
at whatever time
whenever
 we need to but at the same time avoid using too much time as it causes sight effect at
very young age
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a very young age
.
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