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Some people think that competitive sports are important for a child education, others think that it has negative effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sports are the key to physical and mental health. Every school around the world has a dedicated period for physical training. There are two schools of thought, one believes that competing in games is
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 for
child
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 learning, while others think that there are negative consequences. I believe that sports competition encourages the
child
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 to be strong, and courageous,
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, there are some adverse effects. Competitive sports,
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 as football, baseball, cricket e.t.c.
train
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Train
 a
child
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 to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
, plan and execute. They bring out the best in a person. Children tend to perform better and at a higher rate if they are made to compete with one another. Take cricket,
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, players tend to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the goal, come up with a strategy, and try to achieve it.
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 sports have a positive effect on
child
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 education. Physical activity increases the thinking capacity of youngsters that can be
take
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taken
 advantage of during studying.
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, others believe that making children compete with one another can have adverse effects. Every player in a game aims to win,
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 can put a lot of stress on a young mind that can lead to mental trauma.
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, sports focus on winning and not being productive,
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, a young athlete if losing, tries to use false methods to achieve a goal.
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,
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 develops a negative perception among the kids.
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,
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 sports
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 increase the risk of injuries. To conclude, I think that competitive sports can have a positive outcome on
child
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 schooling as it teaches to perform accurately, not be fearful, and make the most.
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, it
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 has some negative effects,
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 as stress and a misconception that a goal is to win no matter what.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Positive Aspects Vocabulary:**
  • Teamwork, cooperation, community, discipline, time management, physical health, combat obesity, resilience, coping skills, self-esteem, confidence, well-being
  • **Negative Aspects Vocabulary:**
  • Pressure, stress, anxiety, detrimental impact, time commitment, academic pursuits, risk of injury, severe injuries, unhealthy competition, aggression, unsportsmanlike behavior, burnout, lose interest, motivation
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