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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exerciseand avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

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Health is the key to success. It is the most important aspect of an individual's life. As they say 'health is wealth', a
person
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 with a healthy
body
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 and soul can function to the best of its capacity in any given task. A
person
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 who exercises regularly consumes a balanced
diet
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 and sleep properly is considered to be in good shape. There are several ways to stay healthy in my country which includes a good
diet
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, exercise and rest. The role of a good and balanced
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 to the health of a
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 is like the role of the ground floor
to
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of
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 the building. An adequate meal does not mean to have plenty of
food but
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food, but
 to have a
diet
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 consisting of the appropriate and right amounts of nutrients including protein, carbohydrates and fat. The amount of nourishment required by the
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 varies from
person
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 to
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.
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 being rich in nutrients and minerals, the time of
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 plays an essential role as muscle activity varies with physical activity and sleep pattern.
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, to stay fit, constant exercise is required. Exercise should be carried out regularly to keep your
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 in good shape at all times and not only when the need arises. One study says 'People who work out for 40 minutes daily along with consuming a healthy meal tend to perform better at both work and personal level'.
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The regular training
 ensures that the number of nutrients supplied to the
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 is used appropriately.
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, to be strong, good sleep is a must. The amount of amino acid activity during sleep is greater that stimulates muscle protein synthesis and improves whole-
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 net protein balance. According to the study, sleep deprivation affects muscle gain and recovery,
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 8 hours of sleep overnight is a must to remain physically and mentally healthy. To conclude, I believe that health is a basic unit of life. Consuming a
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 rich in nutrients, exercising regularly and relaxing suitably are the keys to a healthy life.
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