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Some people believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

The demand to get manual
work
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 done has led to the employment of labourers.
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, some people are of the
opinion
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 that blue-collar labourers should receive the same remuneration as white-collar employees. I totally disagree with
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 stance due to a number of reasons. Those that support
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notion consider
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notion, consider
 the strenuous nature of manual labour. These employees
work
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 longer hours and depending on their job descriptions, they might have to lift heavy weights which could cause deteriorating health and reduce the quality of their lives. A good example is a survey carried out in an
orthopedic
of or relating to orthopedics
orthopaedic
 hospital, most of their patients were retirees from manufacturing factories where they served as manual workers.
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 is to show the after effect of exhausting labour on the long run. In my own
opinion
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, employees with advanced degrees should be rewarded higher because of the high level of professionalism they infuse
in
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into
 their
work
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. They are not only being paid for their time and physical
work
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 but
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 their mental capabilities and skill set among other attributes they could have learnt only by furthering their education. Rewarding them
accordingly
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 will not only improve their
self-worth but
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self-worth, but
 motivate them into putting more efforts in the
work
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 done
hence
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 greater productivity. In conclusion, despite some individuals’
opinion
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 that there should be equality in salaries of certified employees and manual labourers, I am of the contrary
opinion
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 because of the high levels of professionalism that qualified workers exhibit.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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