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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the number of advertisements has increased a lot in order to sell the
product
, though the way the
product
 should respond is not responding well. I would agree that the big companies are just trying to make people buy their
product
, even its
quality
 is reduced. Some products have even had some side-effects on the people.
First
, If we talk about the
product
 like hair oils, a company promise that their oil would stop hair from falling and by assigning its advertisements to big movie stars, they try to manipulate consumers to buy their
product
.
However
, after using it, people realise that it is not making their hair strong and falling is consistent as it was earlier. It is because, the materials they use are not a high
quality
 because if they make a better
quality
product
, one day everyone would not use their
product
 after using it once because the problem would be cured after using it.
Second
, there has been several reports registered
this
 year against some companies about the side-effects that their
product
 caused after using it. It occurs due to more number experimentation is done and lack of testing of the
product
 is performed. Some companies in order to save their money use inferior
quality
 of raw items to make their
product
. If the
quality
 of the goods does not improve, it would be not worthwhile wasting our money in order to buy a bad
quality
 of the
product
. In conclusion, it is not right to invest most of the money on the advertisement
instead
 of improving the
quality
 of the goods. If these products do not give useful results, most of the people would consider not buying it in the future.

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