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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Many people believe that a separate industrial zone should be established outside the cities to shift all the big industries there. I am of the view that,
although
 it may have some minor drawbacks, it would be beneficial to the population in terms of environment protection and reducing the overcrowding on the city roads. One of the main benefits of developing the regional zones for large companies outside the urban living would be its effect on the environment. The presence of an industry inside the city results in disposal of hazardous chemicals into the water bodies and release of toxins and carbon dioxide into the air.
This
 is an extremely dangerous situation leading to deleterious health issues for the urban dwellers. To illustrate, in Karachi, one of the major cities of Pakistan, several industries is working within the urban zones and resulted in a significantly high incidence of occupational diseases and respiratory problems in those living in the surroundings.
Similarly
, another issue is heavy traffic entering into the cities for the transport of goods to and from the industry. By moving the industry away
such
 problems will be sorted out.
On the other hand
, one of the minor drawbacks of industries away from the centre is that, it would cost the workers more.
In other words
, the employees have to spend a significant amount of their earnings on the commuting to and from the workplace.
Moreover
, it would
also
 have a financial burden on the government. The government has to develop the road or rail infrastructure to
this
 new industrial area, and
also
 has to bring the basic necessities of life there, including water for domestic and industrial purpose, electricity and other commodities. To conclude, I firmly believe that while developing the new industrial zones outside the urban areas would be costly for the workers, industrialists and the government, its advantages are far more significant and long lasting for the local population, and may prove economical in the long run considering the reduction in the cost of health issues and traffic problems which would be mitigated by
such
 measures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic Development
  • Job Opportunities
  • Local Spending
  • Infrastructure Development
  • Urban Congestion
  • Traffic Congestion
  • Pollution Levels
  • Overpopulation
  • Operational Costs
  • Quality of Life
  • Living Conditions
  • Commuting
  • Community Development
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Social Services
  • Environmental Impact
  • Innovation Hubs
  • Collaborations
  • Profitability
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