Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons. What are the positive and negative aspects.

#culture #world #aspects

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

With

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

modernization, the culture throughout the globe

is appearing

Wrong verb form

appears

show examples

identical to the

people

Use synonyms

. It has often

debated

Add a missing verb

been debated

show examples

that

this

Linking Words

trend affects the traditions of a nation

while

Linking Words

others believe that its positive sides are propitious to the community. The essay will highlight the causes of the trend followed by benefits to the public and authorities with relevant examples. The first and foremost reason is that

people

Use synonyms

are migrating to other

countries

Use synonyms

for education and career opportunities. They follow and respect the cultures and behaviours of the new country.

For instance

Linking Words

, in the technological era, students want to pursue higher certification in specialized universities, they even apply

Change preposition

show examples

abroad universities.

Thus

Linking Words

, after completing

studies

Correct pronoun usage

their studies

show examples

, they prefer to settle in a new country.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, immigrants celebrate migrated country festivals with

same

Add an article

the same

show examples

enthusiasm. I believe there are several benefits of cultural and traditional similarities all over the world.

Firstly

Linking Words

economic

Correct article usage

the economic

show examples

development of the community will improve with the increase in businesses with other nations having similar trends.

People

Use synonyms

across the globe share the same fashion, food, and other area of interest.

Secondly

Linking Words

, developed

countries

Use synonyms

will invest in foreign exchanges with the diversity of their culture in the world.

Therefore

Linking Words

Use synonyms

people

Change noun form

people's

show examples

lifestyle

Fix the agreement mistake

lifestyles

show examples

will improve with the advent of new

employments

Fix the agreement mistake

employment

show examples

as well as

Linking Words

by adopting multicultural skills.

To conclude

Linking Words

, in my opinion, similarities in culture across the world will be advantageous to the individual nation

along with

Linking Words

other

countries

Use synonyms

. Cultural diversity differences will be reduced, which will be supportive for an individual living in a foreign nation.

Moreover

Linking Words

, globalization will enhance the economic growth of

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

developing

countries

Use synonyms

by creating international trade business and other employment options.

Tue Sep 10 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly summarize the main points of your essay and provide a clear sense of closure to your reader. Use topic sentences and transitions to connect ideas throughout the essay for improved coherence and cohesion.

task response

Your essay addresses the prompt but could benefit from providing a more comprehensive response with deeper analysis of the reasons and impacts of cultural similarity around the world. Ensure that you fully address all aspects of the prompt in a balanced way.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

12
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
Fewer young people play sports these days. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more young people to do sports?
There have been numerous instances of decreasing exercise among teenagers, especially those who are inactive and losing their physical fitness. This decline is mainly due to teenagers receiving heavy assignments from school and getting caught up in excessive online entertainment and recreation. Several solutions should be implemented to address the decline in sports participation among teenagers.
4.5
band
Schools should prepare students for the labour market and not waste tme and resources on theoretcal knowledge. Do you agree or disagree?
Education Plays a crucial role in society. Some Say that Schools Should teach pupile for workplace instead of teaching theoretical-based on education. I Partically agree with this statement and a further explanation will be presented in this essay.
6.5
band
Some people believe that using a bicycle as a main form of transportation has a lot of advantages whereas others think it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In modern society, there is an argument that the government should raise the tax on sugary products in order to affect the average sugar intake from these goods whose high sugar content causes numerous health problems. From my perspective, I firmly believe that it is not a practical solution to make a decrease in the consumption of sweet food and soft drinks, which will be further explained in the following essay.
5.5
band
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In many states in our hemisphere, rustic people are moving to capital cities, so the number of residents in the countryside is slowly reducing. In my humble opinion, I think that this has a negative effect on the development of one country.
4.5
band
The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans for the Southwest Airport in its current state and after the development in the upcoming year are illustrated below.

Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons. What are the positive and negative aspects.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Fewer young people play sports these days. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more young people to do sports?

Schools should prepare students for the labour market and not waste tme and resources on theoretcal knowledge. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that using a bicycle as a main form of transportation has a lot of advantages whereas others think it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.