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There are debates about the

punishment

which is given for each crime. Some people argue that for each type of criminal act there should be given fixed

punishment

. Other people believe that condition and motives should be taken

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into

consideration before deciding on the

punishment

. I completely believe that these

factor

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factors

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are

have been

crucial before giving

punishment

because it shows justice and fairness to all people. In

this

essay, I will explain

this

thesis statement with example and logical reason to support

this

view. In my opinion, It is important to give fairness to judge

someone

crime. Because of

this

reason it is important to consider

such

as motivation and

background's person

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the background's person

to commit

this

criminal action.

For example

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we cannot give

punishment

someone

when he or she stole food because she or he hungry because there is no evil intend in

this

action. They do

this

deed because they want to survive and they do not have any chance to make sure their survival in

this

life.

Therefore

, we must give them justice by not give them hard

punishment

instead

we must give them any chance to live better by giving them social security. In conclusion, I believe that each crime must be

punish

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punished

properly considering some factors

such

as background and motives of

someone

in order to perform justice and fairness. It is very important because we cannot conduct

punishment

someone

who do not have evil intention to hurt other

people

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people, instead

instead

we must help them by giving them social security.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

256 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that there should be fixes punishment for each type of crime.others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken in to consideration whrm deciding on the punishment

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some experts, believe that it is better for children to begin learning, a foreign language at primary school, rather than secondary school, do the advantages of the outweighes the disadvantages.

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more fathers are taking break from their careers so that they can stay home and take care of their children while their wives work. This is better for the family than having both parents work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.