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In many cities, many people are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages.

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An increasing number of people are choosing to live in high rise
apartment
 blocks. In my opinion,
although
 these blocks of flats are often cheaper, they
offer
 cramped living space and can present serious
fire
 risks. One obvious advantage to living in a multi-story
apartment
 block is that it offers people affordable accommodation in urban areas. With the growth of urban populations, land is becoming increasingly expensive and,
as a result
, many people are no longer able to afford their own house. Large
apartment
 blocks require a small area of
land but
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land, but
 can provide a lot of flats which enable people on low incomes to continue living near
city centers
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the city centre
city centre
city centres
 and near their jobs.
However
, high rise
apartment
 blocks usually
offer
 small apartments with no outdoor areas. For families,
this
 can be a problem as each individual member of the family has little personal space which can result in a build up of tension as relationships can become strained. Another problem is that
such
 restricted living quarters
offer
 no space for exercise which is a vital requirement for healthy living.
Finally
, one of the worst problems of living in a high rise block of flats is the
fire
 risk that it presents. If a
fire
 should break out in one of the flats, the number of floors in the building means that people can become easily trapped on the top floors, unable to escape the
fire
.
This
 was unfortunately illustrated by the Grenfell Tower block
fire
 that claimed 71 lives in London in 2017. The speed with which the
fire
 spread through the 24 floors, made it impossible for everyone to escape. In conclusion, large blocks of flats may
offer
 a cheaper living option, but they
also
offer
 people lower quality accommodation with serious
fire
 risks.

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