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Some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough to learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #level #education #schools #universities #time #facts #skills
In
present era
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the present era
,
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,
education is confined to books only.From, primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not to practical skills.
Childrens
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Children
 are forced to bounded to the bookish knowledge only and don't have
basic understanding
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a basic understanding
 of the particular concept. I totally agree with
this
 above point.
Now a days
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Nowadays
 kids are used as learning machine they do only learning without having
curiousity
a state in which you want to learn more about something
curiosity
,
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,
 for them learning is
study
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studied
. Furthermost, parents
also
 forced the pupils to get good academic results
.
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.
 Our whole society is responsible for
this
 because no one raises his voice against
such
 kind of issues.
schools
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Schools
 make an academic a burden in which class is overloaded with high peak pressure without the proper understanding. From the above discussion
,
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,
 I concluded
thet
pointing out something
that
they
the
govt
something acquired without compensation
gift
.
should
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Should
 take extreme steps in
this
 regard so that the one can get the quality of education not in terms of quantity.
it
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It
 is very well known saying in
this
 regard One pen, One teacher, One child,
can
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Can
 change the whole world.
we
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We
 want that change to be
happened
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happening
 and welcomed by everyone in the society.
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