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some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way do you agree or disagree

#people #hobby
On one hand, challenging body or brain as well as having excitement are argued to be two reasons for belief of some
people which
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people, which
 a hobby needs be complicated in some ways to consider it as pleasurable.
For instance
, some keen to try extremely exciting entertainment like Bungee jumping, Parachuting, Water rafting and high diving. Actually Adrenaline hormone is produced in a person who faced with stress
as a result
 of
exciting activities stimulates release
Suggestion
the exciting activities stimulates release
 of Dopamine in
nervous system
Suggestion
the nervous system
 that lead to feel wellbeing. Some enjoy facing with amusement which challenge their body or their mind.
For example
, solving a difficult puzzle or defeating a competent opponent in chess is delightful.
Also some
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Also, some
 tough activities need special physical ability that when people can afford them, they feel
satisfaction
Suggestion
satisfied
.
On the other hand
, having a relaxing activity and decreasing stress are considered to be two advantages of having simple and easy hobbies. We live in
stressful world
Suggestion
a stressful world
 and when we talk about spending leisure time, a lot of people prefer to do simple hobbies.
For example
, collecting
stamp
Suggestion
stamps
, watching TV, walking and some things like those are helpful for stress reduction.
Also those
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Also, those
 amusements which do not need to make special efforts has a great effect on mental health and make us relax. In the light of recent research in to consequence of doing relaxing hobby, we know that people who spend their time on calm hobby like reading book, jogging and so on has a lower risk of heart disease because of relaxing life style
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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