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There was a time when people only shopped out of necessity, but these days shopping seems to have become a new form of leisure activity. People don't appreciate the value of money anymore. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Shopping
to
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for
 some people means buying things that are necessary in the house for usage
,
Accept space
,
while others believe it is time to spend time with their families or colleagues at work and for
fun
.
this
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This
 essay will
agrees
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agree
 on the basis that shopping is for the
fun
 of it. Shopping is majorly done when
grocceries
a marketplace where groceries are sold
groceries
 in the house
is exhausted
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are exhausted
in
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from
 the old days and
then
 a list is made by family members and one person is assigned to go for the
grocessies
,
Accept space
,
that
is the main reason shops are
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are the main reason shops being
is the main reason shops are
 available and
grocessies
narrow-leaved green herbage: grown as lawns; used as pasture for grazing animals; cut and dried as hay
grasses
grosses
 are labelled and
also
 given price tagged but nowadays
,
Accept space
,
most especially the youth
,
Accept space
,
see it as a recreational
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 or a place to relax
,
Accept space
,
catch
fun
 with their friends or family
.
Accept space
.
 M
ost of the
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
 time, major shopping malls ,are filled with a lot of customer not for the sake of buying things ,m
o
Accept space
,
st are there for the
fun
of it ,
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show off
to see new things that are available,there by unnecessary things that are not to be bought will be purchase by them,thereby money spent will be more than their budget In concluaion, shopping is seen as a recreational affair and not for buying of important things needed by people,rather it is for them to showoff or to catch
fun
 with their family or friends

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