Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

Research
in science
field
must be conducted dan
mo
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
than
Dan
nitored by the state rather than private industry. I agree to
this
statement with extent for some reasons. In
this
essay, I will explain with examples and explanation to demonstrate some points. In my opinion the
government
should execute and controlled certain scientific res
earches especially wh
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researches, especially
en it related to national security
such
as
research
for national def
ense.
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
For example
:
in
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:
Indonesia, the
research
to produce weaponry for arm
y an
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the army
d police is conducted by PT Pindad as
government
body which has dut
y to
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a duty
the duty
make
research
and development of Indonesian weapon for sol
dier an
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soldiers
a soldier
the soldier
d other national official guard.
Therefore
, there is no ano
ther in
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
s
titution especially fr
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institution, especially
om private corporation which is allowed to create
this
equipment. It is because
this
field
is very dangerous to be carried without supervising process by the
government
. I do not look the other side too. In my view, I believe that sta
te sh
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the state
states
a state
ould give private institution chance to implement dif
ferent kind of
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different kinds
a different kind
research
. I think it is important because it can improve not only in science
field
dev
elopment but
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development, but
also
in eco
nomic
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the economic field
field
.
For example
:
re
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:
search conducted by pri
vate corporation in
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private corporations
a private corporation
med
icine world.
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the medicine world
This
kind of study not only can help people from dis
sease but
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disease, but
disease but
diseases but
also
can create something new in med
ical world. A
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the medical world
nother benefit is It can improve economic condition because it provides job
fo
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jobs
r scientist and ano
ther si
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
m
iliar wo
marked by correspondence or resemblance
similar
rker in
this
area. In conclusion, I am convinced that there is a certain
research
which must be held and need
government
supervision because it relates crucial things
such
as national def
ense. B
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
ut, I
also
believe that it is important too
to gi
in the direction of
to
to to
ve private chance to conduct another type of
research
. It is because
this
kind of
research
can improve science development and economic condition.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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