Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

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Research
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in science
field
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must be conducted dan
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subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
than
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nitored by the state rather than private industry. I agree to
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statement with extent for some reasons. In
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essay, I will explain with examples and explanation to demonstrate some points. In my opinion the
government
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should execute and controlled certain scientific res
earches especially wh
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researches, especially
en it related to national security
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as
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for national def
ense.
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
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in
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Indonesia, the
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to produce weaponry for arm
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government
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body which has dut
y to
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a duty
the duty
make
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and development of Indonesian weapon for sol
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soldiers
a soldier
the soldier
d other national official guard.
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, there is no ano
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titution especially fr
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institution, especially
om private corporation which is allowed to create
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equipment. It is because
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field
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is very dangerous to be carried without supervising process by the
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. I do not look the other side too. In my view, I believe that sta
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the state
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ould give private institution chance to implement dif
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different kinds
a different kind
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. I think it is important because it can improve not only in science
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dev
elopment but
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development, but
also
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in eco
nomic
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the economic field
field
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.
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re
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search conducted by pri
vate corporation in
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private corporations
a private corporation
med
icine world.
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the medicine world
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kind of study not only can help people from dis
sease but
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disease, but
disease but
diseases but
also
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can create something new in med
ical world. A
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the medical world
nother benefit is It can improve economic condition because it provides job
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area. In conclusion, I am convinced that there is a certain
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which must be held and need
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supervision because it relates crucial things
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as national def
ense. B
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
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believe that it is important too
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ve private chance to conduct another type of
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. It is because
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kind of
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can improve science development and economic condition.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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