Some people believe that adults get motivated to exercise or play sports because of the major sports events on Tv such as Olympic games and football world cup. Others say that there are many ways apart from Tv to encourage them to exercise. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is believed by some that some adults are motivated to
exercise
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and play sports because of major
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sporting
events, others believe that there are several other ways adults can be motivated to
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. In my
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opinion, I
feel there are other ways adults can get motivated to
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.
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some people believe that adults get their
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to
exercise
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and play sports from major sports events on TV as they get motivated by their teams quest for success, and
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get to see their role models playing on Tv.
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However i
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However, I
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do not think
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is totally effective as there might be limits as to what sports and exercises can be done. Others are of the opinion that there are other ways to motivate adults to
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which I totally agree with, these alternatives
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includes, but
not limited to adults registering as members in gyms and fitness clubs where people are usually paired in groups of
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or threes, these members are responsible for one another as they serves as checks ensuring they all meet their fitness goals and
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ensure they eat healthily which
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be gotten on TV.
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to
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, some grownups on the one hand get positively motivated by other people's weight, size or physique and as
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can be motivated to attain
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fitness level, while some
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get motivated by seeing themselves in the mirror and are determined to make a change for the better. To conclude, even though adults
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get
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to
exercise
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either from watching sports programmes or other sources, I am of the opinion that the best form of
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is self
motivation
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which should be the driving force for all mankind.

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