Last year many famous pop and sports stars earned millions of dollars each. Many other entertainment and sports personalities also have very high incomes.On the other hand,most people in ordinary professions like nurses, doctors and teachers earn only a small fraction of the incomes of these stars. What do you think about stars receiving very high salaries? IS IT fair that people with jobs that directly help people are paid much less? give reasons for your answer.

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It seems that salaries do not relate to skill

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education or the value of the employee to society.In my opinion

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this

is wrong, and I feel changes should be made to ensure that people

such

as pop stars do not earn

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huge amounts of money. If we take the example of a pop star

such

as Madonna

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it is hard to see in what way she benefits society.In fact

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her behaviour could have a negative impact on young people and encourage them to experiment with sex and drugs

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and develop a materialistic attitude

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her job does not require special skills or years of training and education.

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there is no justification for her receiving so much money.

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she provides entertainment for people

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I do not think

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can be considered essential.

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, there are many professions which not only require high skills and years of education but

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help other people and the community in general.Clearly doctors

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nurses and teachers are much more useful.In fact

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essential to society than entertainment and sports figures.Their salaries should reflect their dedication

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and the heavy responsibilities they face in their jobs.

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even if we accept

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idea, the problem of how we could make salaries fairer remains.Pop stars receive royalties from sales of their records or concert tickets

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How could

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money be taken away and given to more deserving people?Perhaps the only solution is through much higher taxes for people who earn excessively high salaries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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236 words

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