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Write about the following topic: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Nowadays, people are getting more
consumer
 goods comparing to the
last
 decade. People believe advertising,
instead
 of the
reals
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real
 needs of the products, is the main cause of
such
 behaviour. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss if advertising is the main point to trigger the sales of the products. On
one
 hand,
consumer
 goods are getting better and better in recent years.
Instead
 of using
one
 machine to do laundry, and another
one
 to dry clothes, there are machines that can wash and dry clothes together. Air filtering in your house was not affordable twenty years ago, but most families in China at least have
one
 air filtering system at
home to due with
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home due to
home to due to
 the air pollution in
china
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
. Products are getting better and cheaper,
this
 is
one
 of the reasons why
consumer
 goods are going up.
On the other hand
, advertisements surround us everywhere we go. There is probably not going to be
one
 day where you are not going to find some form of an advertisement in your daily life. These advertisements affect us unconsciously. The graphic or video used in advertisements
encourage
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encourages
consumer
 to make
purchase
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purchases
 they were not aware of in order to boost profit. Due to the numerous advertisement, consumers might have
purchases
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purchased
 products they do not need. They might have purchased a new washing machine even
the old
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the oldest
one
 still working. They might have purchased a swimsuit that looks nice on a
celebrity but
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celebrity, but
 might not fit her.
This
 is another
reasons
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reason
of
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for
 the high sales of
consumer
product
. In conclusion,
advertisement
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the advertisement
an advertisement
 is not the only reason for the high sales of popular
consumer
 goods. The
product
 advancement and the
product
 pricing are
also
 the reason of the sales boots for the
consumer
product

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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