Some parents believe that a child should not waste time by reading entertainment books, instead they should spend time to read educational books only. What is your opinion about this.

Parents play
major role
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a major role
in building up the mental health of children.
Therefore
, their decision relevant to children's reading habit as well as all other aspects of their childhood actions is pivotal.
Entertainment
books and educational books
serves
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serve
entirely different purposes in growth of a child's
minset
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
.
Although
some parents tend to compel their children towards educational books, in my
opinion both
Accept comma addition
opinion, both
books should be in the children's reading portfolio.
Primary function
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The primary function
A primary function
of educational books is to prepare children for understanding educational materials and
thus
completion
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the completion
of study curriculum so that the children gain literacy and
ability
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the ability
to participate in exams and perform satisfactorily. For
this
reason, some parents consider that their duty is to create a firm binding between their children and educational books. Their perspective is, if they can engage their children in attending educational books for longer they feel appeased anticipating that their children will secure higher score in the exams of their school and possess
higher rank
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the higher rank
there. Since the parents value academic results of their children too highly, they don't take more than calculative risk in engaging their children in contemplating in
entertainment
books or so forth. Perhaps,
this
is an overcautious and
more rigid attitude
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a more rigid attitude
towards children's mental buildup. Apart from reading educational books,
entertainment
books magnify
value
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the value
towards
mental development
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the mental development
of the children. For children, only reading educational books may result in massive blockage in appropriately responding diverse situations creatively and wisely.
Entertainment
books
also
play role in development of children's analysis power. Considering all the aspects mentioned above, I think parents should liberate their children to an extent that they may read
entertainment
books in their pleasure
pasttime
a diversion that occupies one's time and thoughts (usually pleasantly)
pastime
. They should
also
monitor that children
doesn't get
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don't get
overwhelmed into
entertainment
books.

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