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people now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

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It is true that with the development of
communication
 technology and transportation, people are being more freedom to work and live anywhere they like. From my perspective,
although
this
 may have several advantages, I believe that the drawbacks are greater than the benefits. On the one hand, the flourishing of
communication
 technology and transportation is beneficial in some ways.
Firstly
, the most striking point is that
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 and mobile phone technologies have revolutionized working life and play a vital role in connecting people over the world;
that is
 why not only can citizens in these days work at home and communicate via email, online network and video conferencing but
also
 they may save time and money.
Secondly
,
the more cheap
Suggestion
the cheapest
 airline and high-speed
transport
Suggestion
transportation
 systems bring about narrow physical distance, the more people might connect with others instantly at their fingertips.
Finally
, it is undeniable that technologies
have been drawn
Suggestion
have been drawing
inspiration and
Accept comma addition
inspiration, and
 easily accessible to the world of knowledge.
For example
, dwellers, especially young people, who can open our minds and gain more experiences on their travel abroad by using low-cost airlines
such
 as Asia, Vietjet or Jetstar.
On the other hand
, I would agree that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks. The prominent justification is that only when people are not keeping an eye on their phone screen while they are talking to each other,
will
spend or pass, as with boredom or in a pleasant manner; of time
while
 they might have face-to-face
communication
.
Furthermore
, at least, they are partly attentive to a beep
signaling
any nonverbal action or gesture that encodes a message
signalling
 that there is a missed call or a chat.
In addition
, because the development of transport which is the key factor influencing air pollution, traffic congestion, and global warming.
For instance
, the number of cars on our street is growing
that is
 a contributing factor in rising temperatures. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, it is obvious to acknowledge the dominant drawbacks of
this
 development, but the possible benefits of
communication
 technology and transportation should not be overlooked.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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