Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some claim that international sport events like

football World cup

Suggestion

a football world cup

a football World cup

are crucial to ease tension between countries and soften nationalist emotions in a safe way. I mostly agree with

this

statement. I believe that international debates are merely political problems and ordinary people should not take

serious

Suggestion

this issue seriously

serious this issue

seriously this issue

serious these issues

seriously this issues

this

issues. Because, national conflicts may cause serious damages from some trade bans

being one more than one

two

wars, if citizens support

this conflicts

Suggestion

these conflicts

this conflict

. Unknown problems are prone to get bigger and countries may become enemies for nothing. What the solution is to ease the tension between countries is to face the rivals.

For instance

, playing a football match is a good example for

this

. Audiences will see their competitors are just ordinary people like them not dangerous ones. And some patriotic slogans

are not suit

Suggestion

are not suited

don't suit

do not suit

the real life in the atmosphere of a match.

Thus

, people from different nations do not have real problems each other and sport events proof it.

Furthermore

, not only ordinary citizens get together in a sporting occasion, politicians can sit together in the see the same sportive event. After that, their speeches soften at the end of the match. Because they can see two tennis players,

for example

, congratulate themselves, rival swimmers may hug each other after the race or footballers may change their shirts at the end of the match with some tears in their eyes.

Hence

, after these scenes, politicians cannot easily talk very sharp about the other countries. To conclude, in my personal view, sporting occasions are very fundamental

to calm

Suggestion

calm

people down, due to these problems are not very realistic and they can disappear after a tournament.

Fri Sep 13 2019

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

270 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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