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Individuals do nothing to improve the environment, only government and large companies can make a difference, To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a general assumption by some, that individuals have no positive
impact
 on the
environment
 while others believe that large government and parast
atals make
a great deal of environmental
impact
. In my opinion, individual efforts go a long way in improving the
environment
, bringing about environmental sanitation and Serenity.
However
 , ind
iv
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,
idual efforts are limited and do not do justice in comparison with the government and large parast
atals.
Individuals are capable of positively influencing the
environment
, by maintaining proper disposal of
waste
 and farming, Its documented, a human produce is 3-5 kg
waste
 per day,
howeve
r individuals pool
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however, individuals
waste
 together for recycling,
thus
 keeping
waste
 off the streets, road and drainages free of garbage. Recycling requires the input of not just an individual, but machines included,
thus
 their limitations. Individual farming tend to consume animal
waste
 in form o
f ma
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the form
nure, and plants release carbon dioxide, an important constituent of atmospheric air which contributes to the stability of the
environment
. Government and large organizations do
impact
 the
environment
 positively under strict laws and regulations. They are capable of recycling in large quantities.
Howeve
r outside of
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However, outside
this
 law th
ere tends
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law, there
 to be a misnomer and companies could contribute to environmental hazards by the release of toxic substances into large water bodies, smoke from heavy duty machine released into air and land oil spillage resulting in water ,air
an
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,
d land pollution which can have adverse effect on soil resulting in contaminated food. To a large extent, I agree to the fact that individuals greatly
impact
 the
environment
 positi
vely but under
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positively, but
 good governance and well enforced laws g
overnment and l
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laws, government
arge companies would have a greater
impact
 on the
environment
.

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