You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: • Explain why you changed jobs • Describe your new job • Tell him/her your other news Write at least 150 wordsWrite at least 150 words

Hello Jan, I hope you are good. I have a good news. I moved to London 15 days ago for a new job. :) I said before you, that they
interested
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in my design and they follow my works on behance.com. The company is amazing. It has many rooms and
a
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latest technology computer. They gave me
Apple
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an Apple
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mac
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Mac
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Macbook Pro M3 Max laptop and
iPhone
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15 Pro. The first day my visual manager asked me. - Do you have any hobbies?
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I said -Yes, I was interested in
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photography
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my camera was in Istanbul. Because I
hadnt
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hadn't
enough space in my bag. On the second day, he gave me a camera for my hobbies. I can't believe that. I'm really happy to work here. They care for me.
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, my performance going up. My colleagues are very nice. I have one more piece of news. I bought my dream car. In the UK cars
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cheap than in Turkey. I bought a Porsche 911. Everything is fine and please visit me. Keep and touch, Oguz Ozgur Ugur
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task achievement
Your letter would benefit from more detailed explanations and descriptions. For instance, you could elaborate more on why you decided to change jobs and what specific aspects of your new job excite you the most.
coherence cohesion
Consider using paragraphs to separate different ideas. This will improve the readability of your letter. For example, you could have one paragraph about why you changed jobs, another about the new job, and a final one for other news.
task achievement
Your tone is very friendly and engaging, which is perfect for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch to the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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