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Who will pay for old people cost government or family

#people #cost #government
First
 of all, I grew up in a country that upholds the importance of family relationship. Wherein the concept of family I have witnessed is that parents worked hard for the betterment of their children’s future. And when the child grows up, he or she will reciprocate the hard work, efforts and unconditional love shown by his or her parents. Nowadays some family
do not have
Suggestion
does not have
 enough time to look their parents so that they have to hire who can take
care
 of their parents, that cost need to be paid by their family.
Better way
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The better way
 is family should take
care
 of their parents because no one can take
care
 same as
family
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a family
 like
patient
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patience
 and love. Some family are not enough money to support their parents and some older people do not have children and family as well. In
this
 case Government
need
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needs
 to build up rest home and to support for their health and life. Some old people have advanced planning for their retire age,
such
 as saving, health-insurance and a retirement pension, etc. In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 way,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
have
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has
 to provide for older people
example senior
Accept comma addition
example, senior
 citizens benefit, Medisave and other benefit. In my opinion, Government
have
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has
 responsibility to
care
 older people who no one will
care
 for them, but who have family members they have
responsibility
Suggestion
a responsibility
the responsibility
 to
care
 their parents.

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