Last year many famous pop and sports stars earned millions of dollars each. Many other entertainment and sports personalities also have very high incomes.On the other hand,most people in ordinary professions like nurses, doctors and teachers earn only a small fraction of the incomes of these stars. What do you think about stars receiving very high salaries? IS IT fair that people with jobs that directly help people are paid much less? give reasons for your answer.

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It seems that salaries do not relate to skill, education or the value of the employee to society.In my opinion,
this
is wrong, and I feel changes should be made to ensure that people
such
as pop stars do not earn
such
huge amounts of money. If we take the example of a pop star
such
as Madonna, it is hard to see in what way she benefits society.In fact, her behaviour could have a negative impact on young people and encourage them to experiment with sex and drugs, and develop a materialistic attitude.
In addition
, her job does not require special skills or years of training and education.
Therefore
, there is no justification for her receiving so much money.
Although
she provides entertainment for people, I do not think
this
can be considered essential.
On the other hand
, there are many professions which not only require high skills and years of education but
also
help other people and the community in general.Clearly doctors, nurses and teachers are much more useful.In fact, essential to society than entertainment and sports figures.Their salaries should reflect their dedication, and the heavy responsibilities they face in their jobs.
However
, even if we accept
this
idea, the problem of how we could make salaries fairer remains.Pop stars receive royalties from sales of their records or concert tickets.How could
this
Suggestion
this?
Money be taken away and given to more deserving people?Perhaps the only solution is through much higher taxes for people who earn excessively high salaries.
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