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Even though developing countries receive financial help, poverty is still an issue. Some say they should be receiving other kind of help, to eliminate poverty. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give examples and suggest what other form of help can be offered.

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In modern society there are some developing countries which need help in order to avoid
poverty
. Some people believe that only financial help can eliminate
poverty
, while other opponents argue that developing countries should receive another help
instead
 of money. In these essay arguments surrounding decreasing the level of
poverty
 in
third
 world countries will be evaluated in more detail. Many consider that developed nations should provide with some finance
such
 countries which are still developing.
Firstly
,
poverty
 alleviation programs help
to develop to
Suggestion
to develop third
third
 world countries faster. Another point is that supporting
such
 countries with finance will be positively affected
to
Suggestion
by
 increasing the rate of economic conditions.
Moreover
,
such
 help improve the level of life gradually.
On the other hand
,
poverty
 alleviation programs are nothing less than large scale national projects. In the
first
 place, developing countries lack experience to implement these projects.
For instance
, rich nations, with their proven track record in
such
 ventures, can provide great help by providing the know-how and guidance in implementation of the right systems.
Finally
, developing countries will be developed as soon as possible. It is widely believed that the root cause of
poverty
 is not shortage of money but lack of knowledge on how to generate wealth.
Firstly
, developed nations need to take
active interest
Suggestion
an active interest
 in education and skill development of citizens of poor countries.
Secondly
,
reach
people who have possessions and wealth (considered as a group)
rich
 countries should invest money to educational projects, which will teach
new generation
Suggestion
a new generation
 how to develop their native country. Taking all these points into consideration, developed countries should provide them with the knowledge, which is more valuable than finance. My personal opinion is that that only education can lead to
develop
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developing
third
 world countries.
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