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Should international news be kept as a subject in secondary school. Discuss both sides

#news #school
Several initiatives are taken on improvement of education patterns were
introducing
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introduced
 international news can be important
step but
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step, but
 it may invite along the debate due to its cons and pros. Education department needs to be conscious
on
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of
 making any changes as they need to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the benefits. Here, keeping international news in the curriculum of secondary school can fetch several benefits. Due to its audio visual involvement. It can develop interest in students as it will be different from their regular curriculum. As news will be involved,
student
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students
the student
a student
 can remain
update
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updated
 with current affairs of various sectors which can work towards their overall department. Any development or invention related to technology or therapeutic services would be on their tips and about all the happenings they would be well aware of.
This
 can
also
 boost their confidence in group talks as they would be aware of the reality in different sectors. Along with the
said
take sides for or against
side
benefits their
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benefits, there
benefits there
 can be several disadvantages related to the international news being kept as a subject.
Firstly
, It will be an additional burden of a subject not only for the subjects but
also
 for the schools, adequate infrastructure has to be provided an each
class room which
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classroom, which
classroom which
 can be an extra
investment whereas
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investment, whereas
 they
also
 need to hire qualified professional from the media who can place and teach the analytical view of a particular news which can be a high cost to the school. Others than
this
 designing examination pattern can be
difficult as
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difficult, as
this
 subject does not confine to a particular syllabus or fixed content.
Moreover
, there
can not
can not
cannot
 be a control on the display of violence or they broadcast of unethical views which is common in international news channels and that can severely disturb the mentality of
student
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the student
students
. In conclusion, it can be seen that the disadvantages and its impact seriously
overweighs
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overweight
 it’s possible advantages.

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