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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The transportation system is the art of most economic growth of a nation. It is argued that
instead
 of the government spending on a lot of roads, they should focus mainly on the
railway
 means of transportation.
However
, I strongly agree with
this
 argument because it will ease lots of congestion on the
road
. Peril of the
railway
 transport system is minimal to the masses. Unlike the
road
 system where every driver is the king, trains are navigated by experts, and resulting in less accidents to the public in general. Another reason is the amount spend on trains, tracks, and its maintenance is less compared to main roads. To illustrate, the number of trains, I or rail accidents are negligible in comparison to vehicles.
Therefore
, it is not dangerous to the public, and easy to maintain.
Furthermore
,
railway
 is among the fastest means of transportation. Not only is
this
 fast, but
also
 conveys more passengers than the other types.
In addition
, the exhaust gas that escape from trains goes directly into the air, and the passengers are safe from its smoke.
For example
, the average passenger a train carries while in transit, could not be achieved by the vehicles,
that is
 the trip a train would go, could cover for three times or more trips of
road
 transport (buses, cars, lorries, and lots more).
As a result
, spending a lot on the
railway
 will accelerate the growth of the economy. In conclusion,
although
road
 transport has its own benefits which could need the allocation of the government, railroad has more merit the state can derive to bolster.
Nonetheless
, I completely agree on government spending more on rail line than
road
.
Submitted by Adekunle on

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