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It is often said that it is not necessary to have a tertiary education to become a successful businessman. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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A common belief of the society is in order to gain significant achievements in the business sector one must not necessarily need to finish its higher
education
. I my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 particular idea. One of the main reasons that supports
this
 statement is the real world examples we have. There are many entrepreneurs around the world who became successful without finishing their tertiary
education
.
Lets
Suggestion
Let's
 take the inventor of the Microsoft
for instance
,
although
 he is a college dropout, he
manged
be successful; achieve a goal
managed
 to hold the top seat of the world's largest software company for a number of years. Another similar example is founder of
electronic equipment company
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an electronic equipment company
 the Apple.
Hence
, it is evident that university
education
 is somewhat insignificant when it's come to the business sector.
Moreover
, to be a successful entrepreneur one must require to have creative and innovative thoughts rather than formal
education
. The business people identify the human needs and challenges. And
therefore
 they try to address them using their skills, which opens new opportunities for them. Evidently, involvement of university
education
 is very less in
this
 process.
In addition
, today's higher
education
 is more focused on professional perspectives than producing entrepreneurs.
Thus
,
curriculum
Suggestion
the curriculum
 of the universities
are mainly target
Suggestion
is mainly targeting
mainly targets
is mainly targeted
has mainly targeted
 the knowledge of a certain occupation.
As a
result they
Accept comma addition
result, they
 do not support to become successful in businesses. In conclusion, to become a successful businessman a person always does not need to go through
traditional
Suggestion
the traditional education system
a traditional education system
education
 system, which leads to end up with a degree or even higher qualifications. Basically, one required to develop its innovative and creative skills in order to gain achievement in
this
 particular field.
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