The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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There is no denying that people become

extravagent

unrestrained, especially with regard to feelings

extravagant

.Today pass time activity of most of young generation

centered

being or placed in the center

centred

on shopping.It is worth considering that can lead to

dissatisfication

the feeling of being displeased and discontent

dissatisfaction

and negative impact on society.I

wholeheartly

without reserve; without reservation

wholeheartedly

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this

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denotes a person or thing

this

essay will support

the the

definite article

the

view with arguments in following paragraphs. I strongly agree with the

opine

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opinions

opinion

that

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Its

bring

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brings

dissatifaction

the feeling of being displeased and discontent

dissatisfaction

among people who cannot

afford

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afford such a thing

such

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thing.Most of people in every society have not

much

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many

resources to get all the things and become distressed which

also

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leads to many crimes.

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criminal

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criminals

who have been interviewed indicate that most of them were neglected by society and they intended

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near

towards

toward

negativity.

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people are becoming extravagant buying

good

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best

which merely used them and put off.

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peoples become more conscious about brands in my country ladies purchase designer out

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be agreeable or acceptable to

fit

fight

feet

and wear

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conjunction used in comparatives

than

then

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hardly one time and

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propel through the air

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it off

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world is suffering from hunger.

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excessive shopping causes pollution all the goods and

appliences

a device or control that is very useful for a particular job

appliances

appliance

comes in

packaging wich

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packaging, which

packaging which

cause pollution of earth and

also

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use of energy.

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addition many

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addition, many

material

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materials

cannot

eassyily

with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')

easily

dispose

off

connects a noun with the preceding word

polyethene

a lightweight thermoplastic; used especially in packaging and insulation

polythene

bags burning causes air pollution.

because

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of which many people are being suffered

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from

respiratory diseases.

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the other hand young population

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more stressed and anxious

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because they are more materialistic they want replacement of one thing by

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

.Even

though according

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though, according

to them these

thing

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things

bring happiness and

satisfication

the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation

satisfaction

in life. In

this

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essay we discussed the major

oppisitive

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

impacts of

today

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today's

trend of shopping towards youth.

according

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According

to me which causes

diversifing

make (more) diverse

diversifying

effects as

whole

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a whole

.Some kind of physical activities should be leisure

activites

any specific behavior

activities

which are

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inexpensive and healthy.

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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

Fully explain your ideas

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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.