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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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There is no denying that people become
extravagent
unrestrained, especially with regard to feelings
extravagant
.Today pass time activity of most of young generation
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
 on shopping.It is worth considering that can lead to
dissatisfication
the feeling of being displeased and discontent
dissatisfaction
 and negative impact on society.I
wholeheartly
without reserve; without reservation
wholeheartedly
 believe that
this
 trend should be changed in
thsi
denotes a person or thing
this
 essay will support
the the
definite article
the
 view with arguments in following paragraphs. I strongly agree with the
opine
Suggestion
opinions
opinion
 that
firstly
,
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,
Its
bring
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brings
dissatifaction
the feeling of being displeased and discontent
dissatisfaction
 among people who cannot
afford
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afford such a thing
such
 thing.Most of people in every society have not
much
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many
 resources to get all the things and become distressed which
also
 leads to many crimes.
For
example many
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example, many
criminal
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criminals
 who have been interviewed indicate that most of them were neglected by society and they intended
towords
near
towards
toward
 negativity.
Secondly
,
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,
people are becoming extravagant buying
good
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best
 which merely used them and put off.
For instance
 peoples become more conscious about brands in my country ladies purchase designer out
fitt
be agreeable or acceptable to
fit
fight
feet
 and wear
thwn
conjunction used in comparatives
than
then
town
 hardly one time and
through
propel through the air
threw
 it off
on the other hand
 world is suffering from hunger.
Besides
,
Accept space
,
this
 excessive shopping causes pollution all the goods and
appliences
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
appliances
appliance
 comes in
packaging wich
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packaging, which
packaging which
 cause pollution of earth and
also
 use of energy.
In
addition many
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addition, many
material
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materials
 cannot
eassyily
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
 dispose
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 like
polyethene
a lightweight thermoplastic; used especially in packaging and insulation
polythene
 bags burning causes air pollution.
because
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Because
 of which many people are being suffered
by
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from
 respiratory diseases.
on
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On
 the other hand young population
have
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has
 more stressed and anxious
,
Accept space
,
because they are more materialistic they want replacement of one thing by
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
.Even
though according
Accept comma addition
though, according
 to them these
thing
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things
 bring happiness and
satisfication
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 in life. In
this
 essay we discussed the major
oppisitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 impacts of
today
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today's
 trend of shopping towards youth.
according
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According
 to me which causes
diversifing
make (more) diverse
diversifying
 effects as
whole
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a whole
.Some kind of physical activities should be leisure
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 which are
also
 inexpensive and healthy.

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